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Playing with words

July 29, 2012

I missed the last Logophilia challenge at the dVerse Poets Pub and didn’t want to have to pass on this one. But this submission may seem the antithesis of this week’s Poetics challenge: Write a poem incorporating a foreign language; blending in highly specialized vocabulary or jargon; or crafting your diction in a way that creates an aesthetic. I didn’t find a place for foreign words here, and although fly fishing has its own jargon, it seemed to bog down on the piece. What I ended up with instead was the opposite, stripping most of the terminology from it. But hopefully this first draft has an aesthetic pleasing enough that I won’t be booted from the group; poets are so strict about these things. 😉

What I hope to achieve is a piece that can be looked at from several angles, revolving around the word “fly.” The first sense is of course the fishing fly, designed to fool a trout into thinking a pointed hook is a tasty insect. The definition most likely to come to most people’s minds when they hear the word “fly”—that of floating or soaring through the air—is only implied here. Less subtle is the sexuality in the piece: the Urban Dictionary lists these synonyms for “fly”: cool, fresh, hot, sexy, dope, sick, badass, and so on.

Which leads to this first attempt. So where do I take it from here? Does it need the jargon worked in? Should I expand it to play with the nearly two dozen other definitions of “fly” listed in Webster’s? I’d love to hear your thoughts.

Fly

wet or dry
I intrigue you
catch your eye
pull you to the
head of your run
you watch
I float serenely
dance past
even disappear
only to silently
drop back into view
just within reach
you sense a trick
but can’t turn away
tension building
you circle smoothly
until
unable to resist
you take the bait and
swallow me whole

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2 Comments leave one →
  1. July 30, 2012 9:47 am

    The teasing tone works like light on the water, throwing reflections, glimpses, and iridescent shimmers at the reader. What you don’t say becomes as important and intriguing as what you do. Marvelous!

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  2. July 29, 2012 8:36 pm

    well…i think you accomplished what you set out to do…because this can go a couple of ways….having just come from branson…and visiting the rainbow trout farm…and watching fly fishermen catch some…you got that…but i def see the more sensual seduction as well in this…and its correlation with fly fishing as well…smiles…well done…i like….

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